![]() ![]() €¢ Lack of scenes and using half-scene like People’s Republic of Antarctica may at times distract from reader interest. €¢ Need full physical descriptions of Sirin, Sybel, and Janice herself. €¢ Bonmot must better permeate the novel, perhaps from near the beginning. To flesh out Janice’s descriptions if Duncan’s descriptions are more definitive, Sirin indicates in his endnote that he removed Janice’s description—only rarely, though.) (Duncan can and should comment on Sybel, Sirin, etc. This may only mean adding a scene or two. €¢ Sirin and Sybel may need to be more integral to the scenes/novel. €¢ “Family†can mean many different things. €¢ To tell the story of a dysfunctional family, especially a brother and sister who try to survive in the world, who want to escape death. I’m still doing housekeeping–only thing I’m good for after working on Booklife, and will post a few things of possible interest before Victoria starts guest blogging on the first…. ![]()
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